Dear First Chapter,
When we first got together and plotted the beginning of Blanche's perilous journey through St. Louis and the magic crimes there, things were very different. Blanche was Akemi and Japanese, you were bloated with too much telling and backstory. Now you've trimmed down, done the Self-Editing diet. It's done wonders.
And despite your accomplishments, you fail to make Blanche obvious to people. She's too scientific. If you don't start toning up that characterization and making Blanche the Best Person Ever, I'm afraid I'll have to fire you and go with Plan B.